palm sunday
palm sunday--
catholic's usher control
the traffic
rain drops--
rain drops--
a kid widens his mouth
to catch some
rainstorm--
rainstorm--
the bright glow of paraffin
lamp dims
splattering rain--
splattering rain--
i bury my head under a
doll pillow
muddy path--
muddy path--
the deep footprints of
a sheep
gathering rain--
gathering rain--
trotting he finally breaks
into a run
april downpour--
april downpour--
a broken branch of a
sprouting kale leave
stepping on the
stepping on the
few protuberant stones--
a flooded road
moonlit night--
moonlit night--
sampling keys on the
puddled doormat
april downpour--
april downpour--
not aware of dark clouds
until the cold drop
3 comments:
Hi Caleb,
I enjoy reading your haiku. Im no expert, but you seem to have a natural feel for it.
I think my favourite is 'gathering rain'. Its got a lot of movement in it - obviously - but I particularly like the fact that you've left it up to the reader to decide whether its a person or an animal thats breaking into a run. Nice one!
moonlit night--
sampling keys on the
puddled doormatI really liked this because keys are so important to many of us, and are a symbol for other things too. I love the 'moonlit night' and the sensual 'sampling keys".
A wonderful haiku, full of sensations, and full of different layers of meanings too.
moonlit night--
sampling keys on the
puddled doormatIt's so good, I had to post a second time to separate the haiku from the text!
Plus I just wanted to say I loved 'puddled doormat' too. It would have been a great haiku anyway, but adding 'puddled' adds so much, including an exceptional light touch of haiku humour. ;-)
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